To be honest, the only reason I wrote these pieces was because they were assignments. My first piece that I chose to put on my blog was my Scarlet Letter essay. I chose this because I feel like I put the most time into it, and Mrs. Turner seemed to like it. I wrote about the flaws in the plot of The Scarlet Letter. My three main flaws I discussed were how Chillingworth's return was kind of overlooked and not well described, how there were many overly coincidental meetings between characters, and how Pearl acted much too mature for her age. The reason I chose this topic for this essay was because I was trying to find something I could write about to discuss how much I loathed reading The Scarlet Letter still being nice as to not get a zero. I thought about the reason I hated it, and I remembered thinking to myself about how disconnected the plot seemed, and the more I thought, the more it seemed like I had enough to construct an essay. The nature essay was pretty much just the result of an assignment. The point I tried to get across the reader was how Emerson and Thoreau had seen nature as a perfect place, and how different things are today.
Part 2
I considered revising my scarlet letter essay because Mrs. Turner had pointed out that some of the plot flaws I had discussed were based on untrue points. I decided they were close enough and still confusing to the reader, so therefore still flaws, and did not edit that part of my essay. Following Mrs. Turner's advice, I added sensory language to the beginning of my nature essay. I also added the first sentence to my second paragraph because Mrs. Turner had informed me that you couldn't start a paragraph with a quote. So, I added a sentence about Transcendentalists' beliefs before cutting to the quote of a Transcendentalist.
Part 3
I like how Hank quoted the bible in his scarlet letter essay, I felt like that made a powerful impact on the essay. hankse3blog.blogspot.com I also like Lewis Sheridan's sensory language in his nature essay. It makes you feel like you're really there. lewissheridan.blogspot.com Another essay in which I really liked the sensory language was David Watson's essay about his first time surfing. yodude3128.blogspot.com
2 comments:
Luke,
I know that you only wrote these pieces because they were assigned. I'm definitely a nerd, and even I wouldn't have written these essays unless they were assigned. What did you figure out about yourself as a writer as a result of writing these pieces?
You're a wonderful writer, and I hope you will continue to pursue excellence in your writing.
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